Monday, November 21, 2005

baat ek raat ki

2:02
“ek chai”
Grunt

2:04
Train whistles
“do rupiya, pyali wapas”

2:05
Chug chug…
half cup…
“pyali……”

S3… chug chug chug…

2:06
Oof! Oof! Slurp…

S6…S7…… chug-chug, chug-chug…

2:07
Ouch! Oof ooof!
“yeh lo!!”

2:08
S11……running desperately
“haath do!”

shit! !
"jaldi!!"

“meri chai?!” she asked laughing as I climbed in panting!

PS: Creative. trying a hand at the 55 word story.

6 comments:

DilettanteMoi said...

Cute!! :)) In fact, make that 'Very cute'!!

Ashu M said...

Nicely done!
And I see you're afflicted with the "can't stick to a single language for too long" bug!

parikrama said...

>> “do rupiya, pyali wapas”

That 'pyaali waapas' was a stroke of genius.. Haven't heard that phrase for long long time!!

Vaise Reshmi ji, jabse Laalu ji aaye hei.. pyaali has become outdated,I hear, these days they have those Kulhads (disposable earthern cups) to serve Chaai-Paani.

Nice attempt.. enjoyed it thoroughly.. though in-between some of the "Ooohss" & "Slurrrps" my mind wandered off to totally different scenarios !! Yikess..

Reshmi said...

hey funny
- thanks! :)

ashu!

yea - it is soo hard nai? :p

paapikrama!!
i wanted to say that for a long time now :P apparently u have a mind to qualify for it too ;)

and thanks for the comment :)

Priya Sivan said...

Reshmi! Gosh! Phew! I can imagine it but I am the tense type :)

Anonymous said...

Beautiful ! very creative indeed :) its been a pleasure reading ur blogs :)